Look at the extract from 'Again, a thing I have often seen' to the end. How does Florence Nightingale try to persuade her readers that neglecting fresh air is a serious danger to the sick? You should comment on: • what the writer says; • how the writer says it. You should refer to the text to support your comments. [10 marks]
AO2 (published assessment objective): Explain, comment on and analyse how writers use language and structure to achieve effects and influence readers, using relevant subject terminology to support their views (English). For Geography: demonstrate geographical understanding of concepts and how they are used in relation to places, environments and processes, and the interrelationships between places, environments and processes. For History: explain and analyse historical events and periods studied using second-order historical concepts.
Assessed against AO2 using Revision Robin's own level descriptors below. These are not the exam board's mark scheme. Every quotation in the feedback is checked against your answer and the extract before you see it, and a teacher's mark overrides ours.
| Level 4 · 9 to 10 | Perceptive, detailed analysis. Explains precisely how specific word choices, techniques or structural features shape the reader's response; quotations are apt and well chosen; terminology is accurate and sharpens the point rather than decorating it. |
| Level 3 · 6 to 8 | Clear, relevant explanation of effects. Quotations are relevant and mostly well chosen; terminology is accurate; the answer explains effect rather than only naming features. |
| Level 2 · 3 to 5 | Some understanding of effects. Attempts to comment on effect, often in general terms; some relevant quotation; terminology sometimes used, sometimes inaccurately. |
| Level 1 · 1 to 2 | Simple awareness. Mostly paraphrase or retelling; little or no quotation; features named without explanation of effect. |